In many countries around the world, life expectancy is increasing. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this situation and give your own opinion.

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Today world is much more different from the past as modern technics, medical method is being developed.

Therefore

, world’s

old

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oldest

population is increasing dramatically.

Although

greater longevity has some advantages, I strongly believe that

negative effects

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the negative effects

outweight

be heavier than

outweighed

outweigh

positive ones. The most obvious

pro of

any factual evidence that helps to establish the truth of something

proof

this

phenomenon is that the joyfulness of a

family both

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family, both

for seniors and their families.

As a result

of having long

life time

the period during which something is functional (as between birth and death)

lifetime

, the elderly can enjoy the most beautiful time of their

life

with their beloved ones while having recreational

activites

any specific behavior

activities

such

as travelling

aroundythe

a short trip that is taken in the performance of a necessary task or mission

errands

world or doing exercises everyday freely.

Consequently

this

increases their happiness level and make more

memorial memories

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memorial, memories

which connects family’s members.

Also

, long

life

span can show how well-developed a nation is. An increased of

life

expectancy is the evidence illustrates the development of health care services of that country, if there is no modern medical method, people could suffer from many serious illnesses and lead to short lifetime.

On the other hand

, there are two main disadvantages that outweigh those advantages mentioned. The

first

drawback is that people have long lifetime are burdening the shoulders of government with more pressure. Owning to an increase in

life

duration, government

have

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has

to take more responsibilities on elderly,

moreover

more expenses will be needed to provide enough subsidy fees as they retired.Another drawback is the shortage of labour force, since some senior citizens have much

experiences

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experience

to keep occupying with their job results in unemployment of young generation.

Consequently

, there will not enough occupation for youngsters who have more potential to evolve countries’ economic. In conclusion,

eventhough

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even though

there are benefits that prove the living standard of one nation when

life

expectancy is long, but I still hold the notion that bad impacts outweigh the good ones.

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Topic Vocabulary:

life expectancy
demographics
societal development
healthcare system
pension funds
multigenerational
workforce
economic sustainability
intergenerational inequality
longevity
proactive policy
geriatrics
senior citizens
ageing population
fertility rates
dependency ratio

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