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Some people think that government is wasting money on the arts, and that this money could be spent elsewhere. To what extent do you agree with this view?

#people #government #money #arts
The flow chart depicts
to
being one more than one
two
 numbers of
passenger
railway
 journeys from Great Britain between 1950 and 2004
/
5. It is clear that the passengers prefer two trends
railway
, National
rail
network
 and
london
the capital and largest city of England; located on the Thames in southeastern England; financial and industrial and cultural center
London
 underground, between 1950 and 2004
/
5.
Also
, they have a same dip point to
milions
(in Roman numerals, M written with a macron over it) denoting a quantity consisting of 1,000,000 items or units
millions
millionth
passenger
 between 1980 to 1990. Until 1980, national
rail
network
 and
london
the capital and largest city of England; located on the Thames in southeastern England; financial and industrial and cultural center
London
 underground have fluctuate
passenger but
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passenger, but
 with 1980 balance of the
railway
 journeys
has been changed
Suggestion
have been changed
. Because of the Light
rail
 and metro systems has hit millions
passenger
, while others have dip millions
traveler
a person who changes location
traveller
 at the same time. After 1980, National
rail
network
 and
Londonunderground’s
Suggestion
London underground’s
 passengers were steadily grown until 1990
/
91, while light
rail
 and metro systems were constantly fluctuating. In 2004
/
5, Lİght
rail
 and metro systems have approximately 200
milions
the ordinal number of one million in counting order
millionth
million
passenger
.
However
, national
rail
network
 and
london
the capital and largest city of England; located on the Thames in southeastern England; financial and industrial and cultural center
London
 underground who
choose
Suggestion
chooses
 to use it approximately 1000
milions
(in Roman numerals, M written with a macron over it) denoting a quantity consisting of 1,000,000 items or units
million
 passengers. Overall, the graph illustrate to 3 different
railway
 in Great Britain and
also
 passengers have variety choice
,
Accept space
,
 it is clear that generally journeys prefer national
rail
network
 and
london
the capital and largest city of England; located on the Thames in southeastern England; financial and industrial and cultural center
London
 underground between 1950 and 2004
/
5.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • enriching society
  • promoting cultural understanding
  • development of talent
  • creative industries
  • economic benefits
  • generate revenue
  • cultural heritage
  • identity
  • prioritize spending
  • needs of the majority
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