There is still a certain section of the society which lives under poverty despite the fact that countries where people belonging to this section live are becoming richer.Why do you think this happens and what can wealthy societies do to help their poorer members?

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Topic Vocabulary:

Unequal distribution
Wealth concentration
Economic disparity
Marginalized communities
Social welfare programs
Cycle of poverty
High-paying jobs
Affordable healthcare
Economic growth
Social mobility
Employment opportunities
Discrimination
Quality education
Access to healthcare
Government policies

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