There is still a certain section of the society which lives under poverty despite the fact that countries where people belonging to this section live are becoming richer.Why do you think this happens and what can wealthy societies do to help their poorer members?

In
this
fast paced world, poverty has been burgeon day by day.
Although
, there are some areas where masses are becoming affluent.
Nevertheless
, the rest of people are facing
poverishment
with a bad life style.In the following paragraphs, I will explore the main causes of
this
problem
and the possible solutions to overcome that
problem
.I believe that lack of jobs is one of the
reason
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reasons
and awareness is
the good
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the best
solution for
this
problem
. The principal aspects of
this
difference between
richer
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rich
and poorer are
corruption
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corrupt
corrupted
, unemployment and exorbitant price of things.Unemployment is the major contributing factor which occurs due to the lack of awareness and exorbitant
education
system.Most of
the poorer
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the poor
people would not afford the
education
for their children due to high fees.
As a result
, they and
there
of them or themselves
their
children don't know about how to earn
money
or profit and knowledgeable things that really matter in life.
For instance
, A wealthy person
know
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knows
how to invest
money
on
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in
share market and how to earn profit due to consciousness of things that relate
with
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to
education
whilst
a
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an
uneducated don't know what is good or bad for him or her.
Secondly
,
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,
due to corruption the prices of things are drastically spur.
Consequently
,
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,
the needy wouldn't buy the things even daily needs whilst affluent can afford all things because they
hace
have or possess, either in a concrete or an abstract sense
have
enough
money
for that.
Hence
,
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,
this
utterly happens due to serenity of jobs and corrupted society. Now, it is
duty
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the duty
a duty
of richer society to help them by imparting them daily needs and free
education
services.Being a human society should give them basic needs like homes, food and they should know
there
of them or themselves
their
responsibility to equip them free
education
classes.
For instance
, there are some countries where citizens collect
money
from their kith and kin and
then
invest
this
money
on
free
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the free education system
education
system for
needy ones
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the needy ones
.They should start
education
campaigns for them for their bright future. In conclusion, I would say there are miscellaneous things that are the reasons for the gap of affluent and
destitute but
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destitute, but
now it's
responsibility
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the responsibility
of both that they take some initiatives for
this
problem
by imparting
education
campaigns.
Moreover
, corruption should be stopped that really lessen
this
gap.
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