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The 21st century has begun. What changes do you think this new century will bring?

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The new
century
 comes with a different technology, invention, political and social changes, and the 21st
century
 has already brought changes in the world and human lives. To commence with using the
internet
, I admit the
internet
 will change our lifestyles a lot. With the
internet
, you can go shopping online while you stay at home with smartphones. It will make the global communication easy, fast and fair. The people of distant parts of the world are now connected 24 hours.
Furthermore
, students can study online without go to school or they can approach some famous universities in the world without going abroad. Alternatively, the officers should not go to
company
Suggestion
a company
the company
 they can work at home with their laptops, desktops,...Or hold some online meetings.
Nevertheless
, it
also lead
Suggestion
also leads
 to some harm. We depend on
internet
Suggestion
the internet
 completely, one clear example is when we have a trouble we cannot address without the
internet
, due to when meet a problem we
also
 use the
internet
 to surf for the way to solve it.
Secondly
, I think that pace of our life will speed up: we will move faster from one place to another by high speed jet air planes. But what will be the most amazing
thimg
a special situation
thing
things
 in the 21st
century
 is going to the outer space and Mars will be available for all people.
Moreover
, with the help of modern technology people can live there. In conclusion, our life has changed a lot when the 21st
century
 has begun. We will get some great achievements in education, technology, health care service and so on. Nowadays, it is rather difficult to image all changes that will happen in the
next
 decades.
Submitted by Minh Thảo Hứa Ngọc on

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