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Write about the following topic: Computers are often argued to be the most important invention of the last hundred years. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In recent years, the technological revolution presented an enormous invention to humanity which is a
computer
, there have many advantages
such
 as remote working or learning, but there has a downside
also
, in
this
 essay, we will elaborate on the importance of the
computer
.
First
 of all, the innovation of
computer
 considers one of the most successful creations in our era, as there are numerous advantages result from it,
such
 as the ability to study even if you are away overseas because the barriers have been smashed,
for example
, I had certified MBA master from Oxford Cambridge in London, while I live in my home country which is Egypt,
therefore
, the long-distance is no longer crucial, and
as a result
, the rate of online education has been raised because the world has become a small village as you can communicate, work, learn wherever the place is located as long as you have a
computer
 plugged to the internet.
However
, noone can denythe importance of
computer
, there is an oppsite view for some people, the more people use the
computer
 the more isolation will increase in the society,
for instance
, the
last
 survey which runs by MSA university claimed that 60% of kids who are using a
computer
 regularly have become more introvert than other kids who not using the
computer
 and in order to avoid
such
 harmful we need to limit the use of computers,
in particular
, for kids. To sum up, the debatable matter will
last
 regarding the most important inventions in
last years
Suggestion
the last years
, the majority of people agreed on it would be the
computer
, as our life has been affected dramatically since the invention of it,
therefore
, I convinced with the same point of view of people.
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