You work for a company and have recently found a training course that you think would be useful for you and your colleagues. Write a letter to your manager. In your letter: describe the training course you found explain why it would be useful for the company suggest how the company could implement it

Dear Mr Smith, I hope
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message finds you well. I recently saw an online training
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named “Advanced digital marketing” and it is made by The London Marketing Institute.
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lasts about 2 weeks and covers subjects
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as social media management, advertising, and
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brand engagement on social media. These classes would help the
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grow fast and have
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better engagement with the people from the firm’s socials.
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, it will take place every Monday and Wednesday from 2PM to 4PM. I believe
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would be beneficial for my position and my colleagues because it would help us develop better analytical and strategic skills, which
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very important for my job. I would be grateful if the
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could support me by covering the fee and by allowing flexible working hours when the
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place.
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classes will make the
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prosper because we will make our social media platforms stand out and we will learn how to administer them. Thank you for considering my request. I hope that my idea will make the
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grow. Yours sincerely, Mary Brown

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language
Grammar issues: fix 'This classes' to 'These classes' and 'firm’s socials' for a natural tone. Also place a comma after 'Dear Mr. Smith' and use 'Mr. Smith' with a period.
format
Use the full name 'Mr. Smith' and a period after 'Mr' and 'Dear Mr Smith' to be standard in business letters.
structure
Keep one idea in each paragraph. The first paragraph describes the course; the second asks for support and how to use the time. Consider splitting more clearly if needed.
style
Choose simple words where possible. Replace words like 'prosper' with 'grow' or 'succeed' to be easy to read.
content
Add a short plan for after the course, like who will share what you learn, to show how the course will be used.
strength
Polite tone and clear purpose.
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Dates and times are given, showing planning.
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Clear request for support and next steps.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite
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