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Popular events like the football world cup and other international sporting occasions are essential in easing international tensions and releasing patriotic emotions in a safe way. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

#events #football #world #cup #occasions #tensions #emotions
The pie charts give information about two
types gender
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types, gender
 consumers in
percentage
 of terms the results of a survey of a new shopping
centre
 in Auckland
,
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,
New Zealand.
Additionally
, four types of satisfied have been shown in pie charts.
This
 shopping
centre
 gives contended via shops, restaurants and design.
Hence
, it is clear that the female consumers have more pleasure than to men
consumer
Suggestion
consuming
 about restaurants and shops. For shop, female shoppers expressed greater satisfied proportion of %71 compare to shoppers of male satisfied
,
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,
percentage
 of %62. Despite, dissatisfied and no comment’ value
show
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shows
 to the opposite result.
(
%38 male, %29 female).
On the other hand
, female consumers' opinions have close values about satisfied and dissatisfied (rate of %59
,
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,
%41), while consumers of male’s satisfied
percentage
 of %80 it’s a most high satisfied. Both of two genders impressed to design of shopping
centre
 proportion of %89. Overall, the pie chart illustrates to result of survey to both of two gender’s
percentage
 of satisfied a new shopping
centre
 in Auckland.
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