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In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. What are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?

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There are statement in some cultures, Students can achieve anything by putting their ultimate hard-
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 phenomenon is offering multifarious benefits to children,
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 a couple of problems emerge due to the same.The following paragraphs would cast light on the pros and cons of
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 statement. There is a plethora of benefits by telling to children like If they put their hard
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 as their best, they can win anything.
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 and foremost, it gives them a confidence, so they can make their wishes needed without any hesitation. Most of the teenagers not doing their
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 without giving a single try by thinking they are not a capable. If they are confident, they will give some try. It's doesn'
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 matter whether they win or lose. At least, they get an experience and know about where they are lagging, how to achieve it
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, some children end-up with over-confident by giving motivation to them.Once they are in the stage of over-confident, they don'
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 carry about others. In fact, they don'
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 listen to others suggestion. They always think they are correct.
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 drive them in a wrong way, if there chosen path is wrong
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, it ends up with mind-illness- depression, stress. We shouldn'
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 predict always by doing some task with hard
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 will give a success. So, if student doing their
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 with extremely hard
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, but end-up with failure.
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 causes them severe depression. In conclusion, even though there are some demerits- mind illness- by stating students they can do and achieve their any task with full hard
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • achieve
  • try hard
  • positive mindset
  • self-belief
  • motivates
  • ambitious goals
  • resilience
  • determination
  • confidence
  • self-esteem
  • growth mindset
  • unrealistic expectations
  • disappointment
  • failure
  • effort
  • hard work
  • seek support
  • individual differences
  • abilities
  • capabilities
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