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Education abroad is the key factor for becoming successful. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Many people choose to study overseas in order to achieve their goals. To a certain extent, I agree that education abroad is a crucial factor.
However
, I
also
 believe that other factors are equally important. On the one hand, I acknowledge the significance of globalized education.
Firstly
, it can give students social prestige in their local countries. Which is going to create many job opportunities in turn.
Secondly
, by studying abroad people face difficult situations, unfamiliar culture, and most importantly they learn a new language. All of these experiences make
students
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the students
to grow
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grow
 into a mature person, who is able to deal with unexpected problems.
On the other hand
, I believe that there are many other factors that can lead to
successful future
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a successful future
successful futures
.
Firstly
, studying abroad may cost thousands of dollars for just one year.
However
, students can save money and achieve more by getting
education
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an education
 in local educational
centers
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centres
.
For example
, in many developed
countries
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countries'
 governments subsidize the universities, give practicing opportunities in workplaces that makes
person
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a person
 to specialize in his or her studies.
Secondly
, curriculums of these institutions
are matching
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are matched
 with those of the local students.
Thus
, they do not feel stressed about being in a different educational system.
Finally
, individuals do not feel
loneliness
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lonely
 as they are living in their native lands, near family and friends. Which, in turn, leads to better focus on goals. In conclusion, while I admit that studying overseas certainly affects becoming successful, I do not believe it is the only key factor. Other factors have
more significant impact
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a more significant impact
.
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