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Some cities create housing areas by providing taller buildings. Others create housing by building houses on a wider area of land. What solution is better?

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These days, some cities without enough
land
 to build house provide housing by taller building for people who work in the
city
. Other cities which have a wider
area
 of the
land
 build house.
This
 essay will give both advantage and my opinion. The greatest advantage of housing by taller buildings can provide a great many people who live or work in the big cities. Many companies located in the central of the
city
.
Therefore
, People who worked in the company want to live near their company.
However
, the
city
 without enough housing
area
 can not build many houses and provide it for people. If the cities make the housing
area
by
Suggestion
with
 taller buildings, they provide a great many houses for people who want to live in the
city
 easily.
On the other hand
, other cities which have a wider
area
 of
land
 tend to build the house and provide private areas
such
 as garden and parking. Most cities with wider
land
 locate in the rural region and have not many companies like the cities. For the reason, the cities in the countryside have a great deal of huge
land
 to build the building.
Moreover
, they can provide larger housing areas than home areas by taller building for a great many people.
Therefore
, they need not provide housing areas by taller building. In conclusion, sometimes, we need a great many houses in the large
city
. For the reason, I think that the big cities without enough
land
 have to make housing by taller buildings.
However
, a
city
 located in the countryside does not need to create housing areas by building.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urban density
  • sustainability
  • public transportation
  • green spaces
  • community connections
  • overcrowding
  • economic implications
  • infrastructure impact
  • maintenance costs
  • carbon footprint
  • compact city
  • habitat destruction
  • greenhouse gas emissions
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