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In a common practice for some students to take a gap year between high school and university in order to do charitable work abroad in underdeveloped countries. What are the advantages and disadvantages for young people of doing volunteer work?

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Charity
work
 during the rift mileage has been
in
Suggestion
at
 the centre of public attention for some time. There are various conflicting views about whether to do charity
work
 for low developed countries or not.In
this
 essay I intend to give a brief outline of the main arguments. Some people believe that charity
work
 is very important during the gap year.
First
 of all, while somebody is travelling and helping people, it upgrades the communication skills.
In other words
, people get cooperated and they are involved in a discussion of different topics and
as a result
this
 big community has a lot of ideas and opportunities.
Secondly
, volunteering brings fulfilment to a person's life, while helping others. Most of
such
 countries have problems with the water, because of the hot climate. By helping people in those countries volunteers find their
work
 meaningful and important.
On the other hand
, others are of the opinion that there are a lot of drawbacks of fund task during the gap period.
Firstly
, it is point wasting for one period, anyone could improve their selves during that life. People could continue preparing for the university and they could get a chance to have a special offer for the study.
Also they
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Also, they
 could find the a job to the point to have the opportunity to pay for the study.
Finally
, it is a danger, at that country which could provide an enormous problem. They could have a problem with economic situation, so there they cannot invest a lot of money into the social working sphere. If somebody has problems with health or with local criminal authorities, the government will not help. To conclude, I think that philanthropy task is important, but not during the gap span. People could improve their selves during that term,
also
 it is a risk to industry in that type of countries.
Submitted by Markiian on

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