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The threat of nuclear weapons maintains world peace. Nuclear power provides cheap and clean energy. The benefits of nuclear technology far outweigh the disadvantages. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, Many countries having nuclear weapons for their defence.
This
 nuclear
energy
 can be very beneficial to the countries.There are various advantages of nuclear
technology
.
However
, there are
also
 some disadvantages about the nuclear
technology
.
This
 essay will give some points about it.
To begin
 with, Many countries acquiring the nuclear weapons
such
 as nuclear missile and nuclear bombs.
This
 weapon is maintaining the peace between every country.
However
, some countries used
this
technology
 for threatening others.
For instance
, A long ago, many countries launch
this weapons
Suggestion
these weapons
this weapon
 to destroy others region in world war. By
this
, many people died from
this attacks
Suggestion
these attacks
this attack
.
Subsequently
, some lose their families too.
Furthermore
, Many people use
this
technology
 in agriculture purpose to kill harmful insects. Many farms are safely growing crops without harming by insects with the help of nuclear
technology
.
However
, sometimes, due to over usage of nuclear
energy
 on farms can affect the crops.
Moreover
, many countries acquiring the nuclear
technology
 in the medical field to cure people
also
. There are
also
 some others ways of usage of nuclear
energy
 in other fields too. In my opinion, There are many advantages of using nuclear
energy
. But, some disadvantages can't outweigh the benefits of using nuclear
technology
.
This
 disadvantage can be control of the government and can prevent it from nuclear attacks by maintaining peace with others countries. To conclude, By using of nuclear
energy
 can be beneficial in many ways. But,
this
 disadvantage cannot outweigh the advantages of nuclear
technology
. Nowadays, many countries using
this
 nuclear
technology
 in many different ways which very benefits for their countries.
Submitted by divyesh bhavsar on

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