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More and more people are opting for ready made food instead of fresh and cooked food .advantages disadvantages.

In these days convenient foods
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have been
are being
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working class people
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and hostler pupils.The trend has been rapidly increased
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from a few decades
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the prime advantage the availability of convenient foodstuff for working women.Because now the female are not only concerned about jobs, even they are becoming career oriented
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consequently
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 The majority of people buy feed just one click on a button
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 the ready-made cuisine has provided a time saving facility
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In the modern world, people are most probably money minded and materialistic.They wanted to enhance their business
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 they are working on long duration in their office
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So the packaged snack is a better option for those people.Apart from that the manufacturer companies are ensuring that food packaging follows the norms of precautionary measures.
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 more the various meals are at the peak, which is prepared by individual in short span of time
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, there multifarious benefits of quick meal yet it has a couple of drawbacks
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All rose bushes have some thorns.The traditional bread is more strength friendly because of less involvement of chemical material.The major negative aspect of packaged foodstuff that it has been stored in chemical containers and maximum use of plastic to cover the eatable things.Until the foodstuff will be reach at consumer door.
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 the processed drink is having a high amount of sugar
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fat scant vitamins
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which will be putting disastrous effect on human well-being and lead to major diseases
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obesity
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 hypertension. By way of conclusion
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 convenient meat has some positive points yet traditional cuisine has been dominated for the sake of everyone's fitness.So it should be mandatory for fitness measures to cook more homemade feed and consume appropriate ingredients.

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