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University should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#university #numbers #students
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Since recently there has been a controversial
topic if
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topic, if
 both genders should be given equal opportunity to
study
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 any subject
at
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of
 tertiary
education
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. I feel that both male and female ought to have equal right to
study
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 at
university
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.
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 with,
university
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education
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 should be based on talent and performance, not based on equal gender opportunity. If female students are good at science, math, language, engineering, management and information technology, they ought to be assured to do these subjects as their opposite gender
do
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does
. Marie Currie and Dr. Jane C.
Wright who
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Wright, who
 made a major contribution to
humans’
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human
 life can be a great example.
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Thus despite
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Thus, despite
 a gender, everyone is should be entitled
with
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to
 tertiary
education
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 since they may discover their hidden talent and contribute to the world. There must be a higher level of competition during
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university years
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the university years
. If students
study
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 with the same sex, they might be less encouraged to compete with each other.
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, if they
study
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 with their opposite sex, they will have to
study
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 harder, carry out more research studies and give up their ill habits in order to compete and do better in exams and show remarkable achievements.
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, since children
are closer to their mothers and mothers spend their
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spend closer to their mothers and mothers, their
spend closer to their mothers and mothers their
are closer to their mothers and mothers spending their
 time bringing up their offsprings, they should have
education
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 to assist their children with their studies. In conclusion, students should be accepted to
university
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 judged by their skills and abilities rather and to encourage to
study
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 harder there should be competition between opposite genders and
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 women ought to be as educated as men since women play a major role in upbringing their descendants.
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