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These days in many countries, fewer and fewer people want to become teachers, particularly in secondary schools. What are the reasons for this, and how could the problem be solved?

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The Nowadays popularity of educator is decreasing and less people wish to be
teacher
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a teacher
teachers
.In my view, there are some main causes of
this
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. In the 20th century, educations
are accepted
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were accepted
 as one of the significant jobs among society.Because they spent their time for teach students and improve knowledge of their pupils.I think
also
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 give lessons to children was the most stressful jobs
therefore
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 government paid high wages for teachers and youths tended to become supervisor more than now.Children and their parents paid attention to their educators and had done what they want.But pupils can get any information from the Internet and the need for teachers are reducing day by day.
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,
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parents are more claimant against their lecturer and professors.So it seems less attractive to children become
schoolteacher
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a schoolteacher
 in
future
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the future
. In fact, teenagers do not want to instruct in the future
,
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,
especially in secondary schools because of secondary school children are in their adolescent period and it is more difficult to teach anything to them.
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 suppose there are some ways to solve
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this problems
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this problem
these problems
.At
first
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, the government should give more authority to educators and they must be more flexible during the education process. İt will increase the duties of teachers as well and they intend to be more responsible to learners.Another method
for
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to
 help to develop
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 situation is that the government may require university and
schools
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school
 diploma from everybody to be employed or leave countries.The administration can make some restrictions for pupils and renovate the oppresses again. In conclusion,
scholar
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the scholar
 should be a more important position for community and everybody must respect tutors for
brighter future
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a brighter future
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