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Some people have the same type of job throughout their lifetime, while others prefer to change. Discuss both sides and give your opinion

#people #type #job #lifetime #change
Although
 some people think to do
same type
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the same type
 of
job
 through their entire
life
, other
think
a special situation
thing
 to
change
 it on time to time basis. In my opinion, I think we should
change
 our
job
 as it can provide a better overall experience. On the one hand, some people are not confident
as a result
, they preferred to do
same type
Suggestion
the same type
 of
job
 throughout their entire
life
 span. They are insecure with their
job
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job, therefore
therefore
 believes that they want
perform
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to perform
 well with their
next
job
,
hence
 they settle
on
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for
 the same
job
.
For example
, a survey was conducted
between
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among
 1000 people, 90% of the people fill confident
at
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in
 the workplace as they weir old employers of that company.
On the other hand
, some people believe to
change
 their
job
. They believe that
change
 is necessary in
life
. Doing the same
job
 over and over again will not provide any improvement in their skill level.
Moreover
, to progress in
life
 we have to take
risk
Suggestion
risks
 in
life
 and move one step ahead. In conclusion, while people may vary in their opinion, I think
change
 is necessary in
life
, whether its
job
 or something else.
Submitted by Ajay Panchani on

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Job security
  • Stability
  • Expertise
  • Mastery
  • Career advancement
  • Personal growth
  • Development
  • Acquiring
  • Skills
  • Knowledge
  • Exploring
  • Career paths
  • Opinion
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