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Information technology is changing many aspects of our lives and now dominates our home, leisure and work activities. To what extent do the benefits of information technology outweigh the disadvantages?

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Information
technology
 has greatly developed in recent years. In the 21th century, it has played an important part in our lives.
Information
technology
 has a tremendous influence on many aspects of our lives.
Hence
,
this
 essay below strongly believes that it has more advantageous impacts than negative effects for people. One commonly cited drawbacks of
information
technology
 is that it is harmful to peoples’ health when they use it regularly.
This
 is because people have to look at the screen or sit in one place for a long time, which causes a number of diseases
such
 as backache, headache, short-sighted,
…
Accept space
…
For example
, most of the youngsters nowadays are short-sighted or long-sighted and become more introverted on account of using their smartphone the entire day.
Nevertheless
, despite of
this
, there
are
Suggestion
is
 a host of significant benefits that
information
technology
 brings about.
First
 of all, communication is one of the greatest changes that can be seen clearly. People from all over the world now can communicate easily thanks to smartphone or mobile phone. People can make a phone call, send and receive messages or face-to-face video chat, which help them keep in touch with their friends and relatives. There are
also
 a number of social media
such
 as Facebook, Instagram, Twitter that assist people not only in contacting with everyone but
also
 in updating news.
Furthermore
,
information
technology
 helps human in many fields
such
 as health care, entertainment, education, economy and so on. Our life has been more convenient and it has changed so much since smartphone, computer, the Internet… were invented.
For example
, people can access a great deal of new data, companies are more moderner with new robots and devices that help them to reduce employees. In conclusions,
although
 there are some drawbacks, it is clear that our life has changed a lot since
information
technology
 was invented. On balance, I would agree that
this
 invention has numerous advantages.
Submitted by Hương Mai on

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