In some countries, an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Nowadays, in some nations around the world, the number of people who suffer from health issues because of eating an excessive amount of them are increasing.

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, it is believed that the government should increase the

tax

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this

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kind of

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. I completely disagree with

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point of view and the reasons will be covered in

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essay.

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of all, I believe that fast

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is not the only factor that leads to health problems. There are many other elements causing different diseases

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as lack of sleep, smoking, drinking alcohol and along with other factors.

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, the cause of obesity is not only eating too much fast

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food but

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food, but

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lack of exercise and heredity factors.

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, if the authorities impose a higher

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on fast

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, it won’t reduce too much the number of sick people.

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, fast

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is very cheap, convenient and time-saving. For busy people, it is a good choice to help them have

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the energy

to continue their work in break time. There are

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has a wide range of fast

food

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for people to choose

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as snack, hot dog, hamburger, popcorn and along with many other types of fast

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, if the

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on fast

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is imposed higher, it will be unfair to people who has

low income

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a low income

. In conclusion,

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fast

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has some disadvantages

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as having too much sugar and fat or waste of money, I believe that these advantages outweigh the drawbacks. I

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strongly recommend that the government should raise the awareness of residents about health

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of imposing a higher

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on fast

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public health
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In some countries, an increasing number of people are suffering from health problems as a result of eating too much fast food. It is therefore necessary for governments to impose a higher tax on this kind of food. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

some people think that it is good for a country’s culture to import foreign movies and TV programmes. Others think that it is better to produce these locally. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Some species of animals are almost extinct; and many others seem to be fast approaching a similar risk. What are the reasons for this? What should be done to solve this problem? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.

Today every large city facing traffic jam problem. what are the causes and how can it tackle

In today's very competitive world, a worker has to possess multiple skills to succeed. Among the skills that a worker should possess, which skill do you think is more important, social skills or good qualifications? Explain the reasons and provide specific examples to support your answer.

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