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Some people think that for individuals, planning for future is a waste of time. It is more important for individuals to focus on the present. Do you agree or disagree?

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Living the
life
 with no plan for tomorrow gives a sense of freedom at least in the short term period. In
this
 regard, some people wish to have a plan-free
life
 in which they could decide what to do spontaneously, while others tend to have goals and vision in their
life
, accompanied with daily or weekly schedules. Indeed, there is a surrounding controversy between these two approaches to
life
; I believe
one
 may enjoy his/her
life
 without any
objective but
Accept comma addition
objective, but
 at the end of the day no
one
 can leave everything to faith and will definitely feel empty inside. In the current era of information, it is hard to find someone without
desire
Suggestion
a desire
 to have something or be in some certain status; people live to achieve their goals. As an example, almost every guy on
planet
Suggestion
the planet
 loves to have a
supercar
, so, is it possible to own
one
, without the hard
work
?
This
 hard
work
 requires punctuality, consistency and discipline which should be Incorporated in micro and macro schedules. Planning out your tomorrow is the very
first
 step of being successful.
Therefore
, it is evident that a holistic approach for the people who their moto is" Time is Gold" will eventually lead them to
success
 and long-term happiness.
Hence
, planning for the future not only is not pointless but
also
 is essential and the key to the
success
.
On the other hand
, there is a belief that after the industrialization age, the system created
this
 tendency for people to
work
 like a machine, the notion which they argue gained gravity with capitalism.
For instance
, industries dictate the culture of consumption and production, so that people shall
work
 almost all the day to reach to their long-term desire of a new car or a better apartment.
This
 trait of " Bigger the Better" somehow pumped the rush in people's
life
 and forced them to
work
 as scheduled. Noteworthy is the fact that,
success
 is an introversive feeling and a guy with no plan for his entire
life
 may enjoy more than a CEO in a big enterprise Who his/her daily plan is packed with details.
Thus
, it should be borne in mind that despite the positive aspects of being on route to your goals, the
life
 itself shall not be sacrificed for the mere mortal desires. In conclusion, no
one
 can deny the real long-term happiness and
success
, people would probably get having their
life
 planned, but the very notion of freedom Charlotte the ignored as well.
Submitted by Majid Tazam on

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