Many people are optimistic of the 21st century and see it as an opportunity to make positive changes to the world. To what extent do you share their optimism? What changes would you like to see in the new century?

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, many believe that the 21st century
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be full of positive development and changes. I am optimistic about
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and like to see some drastic changes in protecting our environment and world. Being optimistic is the key to a happy life and I believe, every individual should always think positively, but to change our globe, we should
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. Without any doubt, in our present
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there are countless problems connecting with the environment, medical care,
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. I strongly believe that in the forthcoming, many people will have an opportunity to travel a lot, get higher education free,
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for themselves
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as well. As an example, we can take the recent
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us that within the next few decades, we will have a higher standard and quality of life if we just pay attention
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our actions and take care of our surroundings nature. Have you ever thought about how our world will look like without wars and terrorism, without crime and
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? I suppose it would be a paradise place!
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, I hope that in the future
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be some improvements connected
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air pollution, because it is one of the main problems
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. On the whole, I wish that people in unsecured countries had more opportunities in their lives, even to afford some basic education or medicine for themselves.
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, today, with the situation connected with coronavirus
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approximately 8% of individuals, namely in poorer countries,
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don't have normal medicine. In conclusion, I hope that in the subsequent years will be some positive changes in our earth and maybe
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useful
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to help people develop medical science.
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  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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