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Nowadays many people choose to be self empoyed, rather than to work for a company or organisation.Why might this be the case?What could be the disadvantages of being self employed?

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In our society, many of us prefer to make their own
bussines
a commercial or industrial enterprise and the people who constitute it
business
instead
 work for somebody else.
This
 may be a consequence of the development of human intelligence or for the desire to feel free.Even if
this
 way of
life
 can appear interesting, I can say that there are a few disadvantages in
this
.
First
 of all, to be self-employed involve some responsibilities
such
 as to be a good
example
 for employers, to know how to be a leader, to have many abilities regarding communication with people.A reason why people prefer to have their own
bussines
a commercial or industrial enterprise and the people who constitute it
business
 is because since they are children in schools are many scholar programs who teach them how to make
money
, to put good ideas about
bussines
a commercial or industrial enterprise and the people who constitute it
business
 in practice. There is a general belief that if you have a
bussines you
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business, you
business you
 earn a lot of
money and
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money, and
this
 is why people dream to own a company.
For
example in
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example, in
 many films or tv shows is promoting the
bussines
a commercial or industrial enterprise and the people who constitute it
business
 man or woman, they let the audience to see their luxury
life
 and
this
(used to introduce a logical conclusion) from that fact or reason or as a result
thus
 become an
example
 for everybody.
Furthermore people
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Furthermore, people
 who work for a company in many situations they felt that their hard work is not paid as much as it deserved. Another
example
 of disadvantage in being self employed is the
lost
persist for a specified period of time
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list
 of the free time or family time.Steve Jobs is the perfect
example
, he had lots of
money
 and an impressionable fortune, but he did not have time to spend with his children and seems that because his chaotic
life
 his health had to suffer. Taking everything into consideration
money
 does not mean everything, having a
bussines
a commercial or industrial enterprise and the people who constitute it
business
 and so many responsibilities can damage the quality of the
life
.
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