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In some countries, the average weight of people is increasing and their level of health and fitness is decreasing. What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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The number of overweight people all around the world is going up, while the level of fitness in society is dropping. In fact,
sedentarism
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 and lack of time have been the main reasons for what is happening,
however
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, there are many ways to work around
this
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 situation, as will be talked about in
this
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 essay. The consumption of fast-food is climbing and the number of activity people is going
doing
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to do
, because, the companies have been demanding more of their employees and people have taken other activities as
priority
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a priority
,
for instance
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, take care of their
child
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children
, and go out with their friends, and study in order to
going
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go
 places.
Moreover
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, a sedentary lifestyle has become usual in our society due to the overuse of social media and television. Fortunately, some actions can be taken to sort out these problems.
Firstly
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, the government must invest in advertisements to encourage people eating clean and doing exercise.
Besides
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 that, schools should lecture about fitness lifestyle and make
more healthy
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healthier
 meals available to the students. Relating to the companies, they ought to build a gym inside the company or to offer a gym pass to their employees, in the meantime, stimulate them to work out. To sum up, easy access to fast food, absence of time, and the exaggerated use of TV and phone have been a trigger to an unhealthy lifestyle. Even so, several measures are available to change the way that our society is living, and we need the help of government, school, and companies
to succeed
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succeed
 in it.
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