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Some people believe that students should study at home , others believe they should study in school. Do you agree or disagree?

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“Knowledge is power” said an eminent philosopher. Studying is an essential part of gaining knowledge and there are numerous opinions as
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 whether the studies should be continued at
school
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 or at home. I believe having studied at
school
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 helps a
student
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 achieve holistic development in comparison to having
study
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studied
 at home. Studying at
school
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 provides an exposure to more practical knowledge as its going to a temple of learning and gaining knowledge physically and not just in theory. Practical experiences are more knowledgeable as they provide experiences that are unforgettable.
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, attending
school
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 helps a
student
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 to meet different people and helps the
student
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 to understand the diverse minds around him as well as how to adjust around the diverse minds.
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After all
, Unity is in Diversity. By learning to adapt well to their environment the
student
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 become fearless of new opportunities as they can adjust
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to
 differences in opinions as well. A recent survey that was conducted shows that approximately 65% of
school
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 friends are for lifetime.
School
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 helps students have an extensive social
life
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 as well as make friends that can be relied upon
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at
 the time of need.
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, after highlighting the benefits of studying at
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, it is
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 worth noting that by studying at
home bullying
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home, bullying
 and harassment that takes place is avoided with the obnoxious
affect
a phenomenon that follows and is caused by some previous phenomenon
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student’s
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a student’s life
student’s lives
life
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. To recapitulate,
student
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life
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 is enhanced at
school
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 with wonderful experiences and memories. It is paramount to take these experiences for future adaptability. Even after some unpleasant memories
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of
school
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, they help is facing
life
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 due to learning manifested in early stages of
life
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.

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