Nowadays technology is increasingly being used to monitor what people are saying and doing( for example, through cellphone tracking and security cameras. In many cases, the people being monitored are unaware that this is happening. Do you think advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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Technology

has become the blessing for mankind because it gives so many good gadgets which makes life easier.In present days, use of

technology

is burgeoning day by day in

desktop

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a desktop

.In

few cases

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a few cases

technology

is unaware for

masses

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the masses

However

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I think that

technology

has more merits rather than demerits because these days people have fascinated toward the

technology

, it saves time

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it is helpful in

educational sector

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the educational sector

as well as it connect people.But there are some demerits

such

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people

has become

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have become

lethargic

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it is

it's

harmful for the eyes

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fear of heart diseases and fear of hacking.

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with

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technology

boon

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a boon

for mankind because it is beneficial in different aspects like

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most of the people are gadget freak and they love to use technological devices because it saves the precious time.Number of individuals are using

there

of them or themselves

their

computer in

there

of them or themselves

their

business because it is

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a helpful thing

for them because they have very busy schedule in their life and they have not enough time to buy clothes and food in the market.So, they buy online by

technology

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some teenagers use

technology

in their study because it

help

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helps

to find some difficult solution which students

can not

cannot

find properly.So

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technology

better

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the best

way to solve

there

of them or themselves

their

problems.

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and,

technology

has some disadvantages

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as,by using

technology

people do not focus in their work or study and most of the ma

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ses,fear of hacking

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