Societies would benefit from a ban on all forms of advertising because it serves no useful purpose, and can even be damaging. Do you agree or disagree?

this

modern society, advertisements are appearing in every corner of our life. Some people argue that commercials might bring worthless purposes or even be detrimental to communities;

therefore

, we should ban all forms of advertisement. I partly agree that authorities should not completely refuse all types of advertising. On the one hand, there are some reasons to believe that governments should force advertisements' disappearance.

First

, several large commercials contain sensitive content or harmful products displayed on television, which can easily seen by children.

For example

, fast-food is not suitable for children's bodies, but it still showed widely in billboards.

Moreover

, it is undeniable that companies could pay more attention to their products

instead

of spending cash on promoting products on marketing campaigns.

As a result

, businesses could bring to society high-quality goods at affordable prices.

On the other hand

, I partly agree with those who claim that advertising is

also

contributing information and value to the community.

First

, the advertising industry creates many job opportunities for employees. To be more specific, there are many stages to make a TV commercial video,

such

as making a video, produce, or makeup.

Therefore

, if authorities banned all forms of advertising, there would be an increase in the jobless rate.

Furthermore

, banning advertising would make buyers challenging to meet their needs, and companies hardly reach potential customers.

Thus it

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Thus, it

would affect not only the business income, but

also

the quality of people's life. In conclusion, for the reasons mentioned above, I would argue that altogether banning all forms of advertising could not improve people's life.

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

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Clear and correct grammar

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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