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Doing an enjoyable activity with a child can develop better skills and more creativity than reading. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

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Parents throughout the globe place spend time reading with their offsprings to prepare them for school where their skills are
further
 developed;
however recent
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however, recent
 research suggest that focusing on reading at an early age can be detrimental, and participating in recreational programmes would be far more beneficial. Whilst, I mostly agree with the mentioned statement, but it has more fundamentals which cannot be ignored.
This
 essay will discuss both sides using examples from the Indian government and other western countries to demonstrate points and prove arguments.
First
 and foremost, there is no age barrier to get a quality education and reading is one of the most important but an integral part of it. Forcing and pushing infants into reading lengthy texts, books
such
 as novels, journal
etcetera
 could have repercussions.
For instance
, in country like India, Bangladesh, Nepal and Bhutan where parents have dreamed of better future of their child by implementing strict rule in their timetable which must include reading of atleast 30-45 minutes a day at some extend it seems to be good but after some days students feel bore, lethargic, and sometimes lossens their metal control over things.
Furthermore
, a recent survey conducted by Indian government suggested that forced reading diminished their motor skills which
further
 results it into shutdown their basic cognitive approach.
Moreover
, recently countries like Finland, Auckland, Netherlands, Germany,and, Amsterdam have designed there education system in
such
 a way that every student enjoy studying through intersting activities
such
 as Word games, jeopardy, quiz and club activities which actually enable self-confidence, better-understanding of vocabulary, infants are now able to think out of the box through enhance level on imagination and creativity. When they are ready to learn, they usually acquire these skills rapidly.
In addition
 to
this
, some group activities
also
 help in eliminating diseases like Alzheimer's, stuttering, dyslexia, Hperlexia. All in all, studying can only be enjoyable if it includes recreational and other practical approach. It has been almost crystal clear from the above mentioned facts and information that doing an enjoyable activity with a child can help develop better skills and more creativity than reading.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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