It is pointless making children who lack artistic talent learn painting and drawing in Art classes at school. Instead, they should concentrate on other creative or practical subjects for which they may have more aptitude. To what extent to do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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my mind the question about pointless making children who lack talent learn painting and drawing in Art classes at school is complicated. I tend to think that children and teenagers in most part know nothing about what they want or what they really like. My personal belief is that making children
do something
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do, something
is wrong because maybe even
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way "making" disappointed them. From my point of view we have to give children diverse range of opportunities
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to
develop and let them
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let them develop and
try everything. Of course is very important to show them an attractive side each one. I mean everyone knows about football or movie
industry but
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industry, but
almost no one knows something exciting about
potters
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the potters
or archers. As for me all not compulsory subjects should be without assessing. Obviously the most expressive painter or aim archer will pay attention without additional assessing. At the same time other children will not feel
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offended, and
offended and
still try to
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cause to move by pulling
draw
throw
better or just will change
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the subject
to something else.
Anyway it's
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Anyway, it's
the most
tollerance
showing respect for the rights or opinions or practices of others
tolerant
, free and modern point of view. Some part teachers have claimed that we have to
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make
be made
children but
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children, but
I think that at the end, even
cheldren
a young person of either sex
children
achived
to gain with effort
achieved
achieve
some
succses
an event that accomplishes its intended purpose
success
sources
shakes
most of them will feel that it wasn't their cup of tea. You know, the majority of people take the view that guessed own right way is
incredebly
not easy to believe
incredibly
incredible
complicated, and to my mind roots of
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follow from childhood where they faced with "making"
educaton
the activities of educating or instructing; activities that impart knowledge or skill
education
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instrumentality that combines interrelated interacting artifacts designed to work as a coherent entity
system
systems
. To
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a quantity of money
sum
up I want to say - we have to give
diverse fascitating
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diverse, fascinating
diverse fascinating
ways and let them make own
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the person or thing chosen or selected
choice
choices
case
.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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