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Some people think that because some children find some subjects such as mathematics and philosophy difficult they ought to be optional instead of compulsory. To what extent do you agree?

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Some people argue that students should be able to choose to study mathematics and
philosophy
, and not be mandated to do so.
of
Suggestion
Of
 their own choice
instead
 of compulsory. I agree that
math
 should be compulsory in schools even if students find it difficult, but
philosophy
 can be made optional.
Firstly
, mathematics should be a mandatory part of school curriculum because
math
 is the basis of all other subjects and careers. Many universities in Thailand require a high level of mathematics. Many companies pay high salaries for jobs that require analytical thinking which only people who have a good
mathematics
Suggestion
mathematical
 base.
Therefore
,
math
 should be compulsory in schools.
Secondly
,
math
 helps them think analytically and have better reasoning abilities. Analytical and reasoning skills are important because they help us solve problems and look for solutions. Coming to
philosophy
, it is not necessary that everyone should follow the same structure of education with
philosophy
 at the core because children can learn
such
 social skills from parents and others.
Philosophy
, as a subject, would be too boring and would only add to the burden of the students. To conclude,
math
 should be compulsory but
philosophy
 should be optional in the classes.
Submitted by Thunyanut Srichamara on

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