Some universities offer online courses as an alternative to classes delivered on campus. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

Nowadays, with the technological and scientific advancements, the Internet has a strong impact on people and young people tend to use it regularly.
Therefore
, online class
are opened
Suggestion
has opened
opens
a lot via the web
instead
of going to the traditional classroom. As for me, I believe that with
this
development, it brings many benefits for education.
However
, I presume that
this
trend may give to some downsides. Some benefits that people may enjoy
this
trend.
Firstly
, Online learning will be more cost-effective than traditional classes.
Secondly
, distance barriers can be erased thank to online education. International students can join courses in foreign without moving abroad.
For example
, a Vietnamese student would be
learned
Suggestion
learning
speaking
Suggestion
to speak
skill with native teachers living in America to enhance their English skill at home.
Moreover
, learning on media may have a flexible study schedule and reasonable for everyone. Because there are now
families students
Accept comma addition
families, students
without
economy
Suggestion
economic
conditions.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
, they have to study and work at the same time to earn extra income help to their parents.
Besides
, they will be looking for many available learning materials as well as references.
On the other hand
, students attending those courses usually tend to procrastinate doing their tasks.
This
,
consequently
, requires students to have intense concentration, self-discipline and time management skill.
Besides
, distance learning students will without regular face-to-face interaction resulting in a lack of rivalry and motivation.
Moreover
, they will not develop as many social skills as the ability to work individually and in teamwork. In conclusion, despite some limitations of online courses, but I believe that online courses offered by universities greatly help the students. Online courses help to spread education far and wide
instead
of restricting it to the confines of the classroom.
Submitted by Giang Nguyễn on

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