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Some people think that homework is not necessary for students’ development. Do you agree or disagree?

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Some people think that,
homework
 is not important for children's
development
 and while other people believe that, it is necessary to give
homework
 to the children.
Therefore
, I strongly agree that,
homework
 plays an important role in a child's brain
development
. Following essay will discuss about
this
.
To begin
this
, many experts said that
homework
 is an important for child's brain
development
. A study done by the Harvard University revealed that, 35% of the kids who are in 12 -15 age groups maintained well their grades are the one's who actively done their
homework
, so these researchers identified a possible relationship between an academic success and
homework
.
Secondly
, they believe that, doing
homework
 will help to improve the memory of children which means that, students can revise their memory by doing
homework
.
In addition
 to
this
, students can practice their studies by doing their
homework
 and
this
 will help to understand their mistakes and
this
 will help to perform well in their final exams.
Thirdly
, teachers can easily teach their students, when giving
homework
 to the children.
Then
 again, children can discuss their problems with the teachers in the
next
 day classes or via emails.
On the other hand
, it will improve the interaction between teachers and children with an effective communication. To conclude
this
, it can be said that,
homework
 is necessary to children's brain
development
 and I strongly agree with
this
 statement.
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