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Some people think an international car-free day is an effective way to reduce air pollution. Others think there are more effective ways to do this. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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A certain group of people believes that a
day
 without cars is an effective way to lessen
air
pollution
 in many countries.
However
, some others think differently and insist that there are several alternative ways to maintain wind purity. In
this
 essay, I will discuss both views before arriving at a conclusion. The combustion of fossil fuels in vehicles leads to the emission of harmful gases like carbon dioxide and carbon monoxide. Reducing
air
- quality is one of the immediate effects of
this
 emission. A car-free
day
 will certainly reduce emission and improve
air
-quality on that
day
 and perhaps on the
next
day
 as well,
however
, it is not a permanent solution because the
air
 quality will again decrease as soon as cars return on roads. A better solution is to reduce or completely stop the burning of coal and other fossil fuels by switching to alternate sources of energy. A lion’s share of world electricity production is from thermal power plants which use coal as a fuel to generate energy.
Thus it
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Thus, it
 is evident that coal is one of the major causes of
pollution
 and its consumption must be reduced. Even though electric vehicles are better alternatives to fossil fuel powered engines, the atmospheric
pollution
 caused by electricity generated from coal is alarmingly increasing. In conclusion, a car-free
day
 alone does not help much in reducing
air
pollution
. A better solution is to identify and avoid major pollutants.
Therefore
, in my opinion, limiting the use of coal and exploring renewable sources like solar and hydro power are more effective ways to reduce
air
pollution
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainability
  • emissions standards
  • renewable energy
  • environmentally friendly
  • public transportation
  • pedestrian zones
  • commuter behavior
  • awareness
  • incentives
  • air pollution
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