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Some people think an international car-free day is an effective way to reduce air pollution. Others think there are more effective ways to do this. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

A certain group of people believes that a
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 without cars is an effective way to lessen
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 polluting in many countries.
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, some others think differently and insist that there are several alternative ways to maintain purity in the wind. In
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 essay, I will discuss both views before arriving at a conclusion. The combustion of fossil fuels in vehicles leads to the emission of harmful gases like carbon dioxide and carbon monoxide. Diminishing
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quality
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 is one of the immediate effects of
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 emission. A car free
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 will certainly reduce emission and improve
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quality
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 on that
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 and perhaps on the
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 as well,
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, it is not a permanent solution because the
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 condition will worsen as soon as cars return to the roads. A better solution is to reduce pollution could be replacing old vehicles with electric vehicles, that run with electricity and which are echo friendly. There are many more effective ways to reduce pollution,
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, planting a large number of trees because trees take carbon dioxide and emit oxygen in the
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 which improves
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 and Using filters for factory chimneys because the gas emitted from factories will harm the
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quality
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 but filters will help in avoiding mixing of gas with
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. In conclusion, a car-free
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 alone does not help much in reducing
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 pollution. A better solution is to identify and avoid major pollutants.
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, in my opinion, replacing old vehicles with new echo friendly vehicles, planting more trees and using filters for factory chimneys

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainability
  • emissions standards
  • renewable energy
  • environmentally friendly
  • public transportation
  • pedestrian zones
  • commuter behavior
  • awareness
  • incentives
  • air pollution
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