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Nowadays children are being encouraged to use computers and digital media to enhance their learning. Discuss the Advantages and disadvantages of this concept

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In
modern world
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the modern world
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digital discipline and electronic media is an important part of our growth especially for the improvement. I agree that the learning skill of our youngsters can be improved using online training and we should promote the
same but
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same, but
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 the same time, there are few negative effects as well.
This
 essay dwells to explain the benefits and effects for digital learning in below paragraphs.
To begin
 with
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there are several advantages to provide learning with the help of technology.
First
 and most important, children absorb anything easily using digital platform.
Furthermore
, they can study multiple languages and
number
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a number
 of different countries, cultures using internet and social media. Nowadays
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most of the school and universities were encouraging and already started
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the adoption
 of online platforms for teaching. For exemplifying that, children easily memorize their poems and rhymes using mobile or tablets.
On the other hand
, if it is not used in the proper way of without the supervision of parents and teachers, there would be a horrendous effect on our teenager life.
Also
, the excessive use of the Web Wide Web and social networking sites can cause the health issues as well.
Moreover
, without proper guidance to use of technology, the young generation might be involved in awful activities. To illustrate
this
 point, there are lots of bad contents available over the Internets and that can impact of the life of children and behaviours. To sum up, digital use of learning for our children are very beneficial and strength the ability, but it should be used adequately
otherwise
 it would be a disaster for your their career and life as well.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • digital literacy
  • multimedia content
  • flexible and comprehensive education
  • interactive learning
  • knowledge retention
  • over-reliance
  • traditional learning skills
  • screen time
  • health impacts
  • cybersecurity risks
  • digital divide
  • inappropriate content
  • supervised learning
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