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Some people like to spend their leisure time after work with co-workers while others prefer to keep their private life separate from their work life, discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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Men and women like to spend their free
time
 with their colleague.
Moreover
, some people do not enjoy it. And
also
, they say that
this
time
 should be for
this
 family. But it can have the same pros and cons. On that topic, it can a lot of positive points. We are with our teammate from dawn to dusk and we do too task together.
In addition
, we have breakfast, lunch even dinner. Because of
this
 we are together for a long
time
. So, talking about the verity subject with them and they like to speak or drink in free
time
. They can have some ideas for speaking.
On the other hand
, when we are in the office for 8 o clock. So, we are so far from my family.
Thus
, my children and family need to have a good vacation during the week. Well,
this
 idea can correct. Because we just see them at the end of the week. Because, we should speak and solve our problems and it can put affect to family’s health.
For example
: psychologist said, speak with our children lead to less than stress. It can have good points, it can
also
 have bad points. When we talk my corporate about all my life. We can allow them that they can interfere in my privet’s life. Sometimes, I have seen to suggest about a topic.
Although
, we cannot discuss about everything with my family, because there are some different ages in the family.
As a result
. There are some people that they said. We pleasure with our colleague in free
time
 till we are with my family. In my opinion, we must be able to balance.
Submitted by Asadgaha Agag on

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