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Wealth does not necessarily guaranty happiness. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

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Many people believe that wealth is the key to happiness. Others feel that
having a lot of
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was a lot of money creating
creates a lot of money
created a lot of money
is a lot of money creating
having a lot of money create
money
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 create more problems than solving them. In my opinion, people who have sufficient
money
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 for basic necessities are more content compared to the ones who have surplus funds. To commence with, undoubtedly,
money
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 plays a vital role in today’s scenario because it is the medium to purchase almost everything required for survival
such
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 as food, clothes, shelter, medicines, etc. If you possess
suffiient
of a quantity that can fulfill a need or requirement but without being abundant
sufficient
 funds to be able to fulfil these requirements, you are going to be satisfied which in turn gives you pleasure.
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, too much wealth creates problems which are not there
at
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in
 the
first
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 place.
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 of all, having too much
money
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 doesn’t give you a real motivation to go out to work which makes you lethargic and depressed.
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, the more
money
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 one has, the lesser genuine
friends they
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friends, they
 have as people get attracted to the rich mostly for their selfish motives.
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 but not the least, having plenty of
money
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 results in a fear of losing it which leads to the
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a business engaged in processing agricultural products and preparing them for market
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 being mentally and socially unhealthy. For all these reasons I feel that having a great deal of
money
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 actually brings the opposite of happiness. It leads people to lose sight of the real sources of happiness, which often come from simple things like family life and friendship. Wealth prevents people from seeing the true value of things, only recognising what they cost.
Submitted by Milandeep Kaur on

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