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People aim to achieve a balance between their work and lives, but few people achieve it. What are the causes of this problem? How to overcome it?

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An incredible amount of energy has been spent chasing the ideal
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life
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balance
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, but most people fail to achieve it.
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 suggest ways to overpower
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 problem. The
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 reason for the inability to achieve a
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life
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balance
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 is the technology of today.
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 more reachable than ever in the past.
Work
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 has gone global, and competition has gone stiffer. The
cell-phone
a hand-held mobile radiotelephone for use in an area divided into small sections, each with its own short-range transmitter/receiver
cellphone
 has thinned the line between personal and professional lives. The
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 blame goes to the materialistic society of today. People want to avail all the luxuries of
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, and in that quest they become workaholics and
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 that attitude becomes a way of
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, because the desires go on increasing and increasing.
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, people cannot achieve a
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-
life
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balance
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 because the definition of a
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-
life
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balance
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 is different for different people. People weave together their personal
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 with their professional
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 to get the best of
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. What works for one person may not
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 for another. Making choices is what the
balance
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 between
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 and
life
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 is all about. There may be times when the choice between moving ahead with your career takes a back seat to your health or happiness at home. The priorities you identify
as important keep
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 why achieving a perfect
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-
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 is difficult. The solutions are not simple.
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We
 must try to introspect and see what makes us happy and
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 set priorities in
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. When we come home from
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, we must learn to switch the office button off. Another key is adopting some flexibility. It never works if we are too rigid with the goals we set for ourselves.
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 but not least, there is a beautiful term, '
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 we all begin to enjoy
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 in its true form. To sum up,
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life
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balance
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 is perceived in a different light by us all, and so achieving a perfect
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life
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balance
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 is difficult.
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, we must all realize that contentment is the key to a perfect
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a characteristic state or mode of living
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of
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Work-life balance: the equilibrium between one's job responsibilities and personal life.
  • Overwork: working too hard or for excessive amounts of time.
  • Remote work: working from a location other than the central work office, often from home.
  • Flexible working hours: work hours that are adaptable to suit an employee's needs.
  • Commuting: traveling between one's home and workplace.
  • Digital technology: electronic tools and systems used to generate, store, and process data, often leading to increased connectivity.
  • Disconnect: to detach from technology or work communications, often to establish boundaries.
  • Time management: the ability to use one's time effectively or productively.
  • Prioritize: to determine the order for dealing with tasks according to their importance.
  • Employer support: programs or practices employed by an organization to assist employees in managing work and personal roles.
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