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Supermarkets should only sell food produced from within their own country rather than imports from overseas.

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Nowadays there are many
food
Suggestion
foods
 from overseas and other countries in almost every country. I
support
 that some of the producers can
import
 from other countries.
This
 essay will
support
this
 idea. Chain of
food
 is really important and popular in global trade these days. People want to reach many different
food
Suggestion
foods
 or product which is not belongs their countries. If there is a
food
import
 from different countries, people can reach and buy whatever they want to buy.
For example
, If a person wants to cook a meal which belongs to tropical areas and it includes tropical fruits, the person cannot find these kind of
food
 in own country.
Therefore
, the meal cannot cook by the person. Unlike, if every
food
 can
import
 from other countries, people can buy and know new
food
 products.
Furthermore
, if the new
food
 liked by people, it can promote to have a new economical side about
food industry
Suggestion
the food industry
 as well. Countries should not only sell their products in own countries. Because
import
 opportunities may
support
 producers who want to earn more money, so they can improve their economic position and they can grove new products thanks to these occasions.
Moreover
, the people who want to discover new taste can reach new
food
 types, imports
support
 these ideas.
On the other hand
,
food
import
 can reveal a lack of
food
 trade precocious and thanks to
import
,
food
import
 can improve.
Finally it
Accept comma addition
Finally, it
 could have not almost any problem with
food
import
, so people can
support
 it.
Also it
Accept comma addition
Also, it
 can create own market and price own countries or in others.
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