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Band 5.5

Supermarkets should only sell food produced from within their own country rather than imports from overseas.

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Nowadays there are many
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food
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foods
 from overseas and other countries in almost every country. I
support
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 that some of the producers can
import
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 from other countries.
This
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support
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this
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 idea. Chain of
food
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 is really important and popular in global trade these days. People want to reach many different
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food
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foods
 or product which is not belongs their countries. If there is a
food
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import
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 from different countries, people can reach and buy whatever they want to buy.
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, If a person wants to cook a meal which belongs to tropical areas and it includes tropical fruits, the person cannot find these kind of
food
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 in own country.
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, the meal cannot cook by the person. Unlike, if every
food
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 can
import
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 from other countries, people can buy and know new
food
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 products.
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, if the new
food
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 liked by people, it can promote to have a new economical side about
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food industry
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the food industry
 as well. Countries should not only sell their products in own countries. Because
import
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 opportunities may
support
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 producers who want to earn more money, so they can improve their economic position and they can grove new products thanks to these occasions.
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, the people who want to discover new taste can reach new
food
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 types, imports
support
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 these ideas.
On the other hand
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,
food
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import
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 can reveal a lack of
food
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 trade precocious and thanks to
import
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,
food
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import
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 can improve.
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Finally it
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Finally, it
 could have not almost any problem with
food
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import
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, so people can
support
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 it.
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 can create own market and price own countries or in others.

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