In the present era, children are found to have fewer responsibilities than it used to be in the past time. Some people consider it as positive development, however, some other people believe it to be a negative trend. Discuss both the views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, modern society

consider

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considers

that it would effect positively on children

not to have

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don't have

too much

responsibilities

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responsibility

towards their actions.

However

, I think that unconscious

behavior

manner of acting or controlling yourself

behaviour

can lead to negative consequences,

esspecially

to a distinctly greater extent or degree than is common

especially

specially

in their adulthood. Most of people regard that infants should have sunny childhood.

This

means, they have a right to behave

careless

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carelessly

, just enjoy their play time in order to have not in the future any mental problems.

For example

, those children who had to be responsible and punctual from early ages, during their adult

ages they

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ages, they

always suffer from panic attacks and it

is hard for them experience

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is hard for them experiencing

experiences hard for them

is hard for them experience

some stress.

Moreover

, if people had

posive

characterized by or displaying affirmation or acceptance or certainty etc.

positive

memories during their young ages, they probably would be

more happier

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happier

more happy

happiest

and

gratful

feeling or showing gratitude

grateful

to their parents. Perhaps the best example is

armenian

the Indo-European language spoken predominantly in Armenia, but also in Azerbaijan

Armenian

culture, in which adults permit their offspring to be

unresposible

showing lack of care for consequences

irresponsible

and to do what they want and afterwards they

appriciate

recognize with gratitude; be grateful for

appreciate

appreciated

their elders and try to execute all their needs.

Nevertheless

, in my

opinion

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opinion, this

this

behaviour can spoil

children`s mind

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the child`s mind

child`s mind

. Cockered infants

indead

in truth (often tends to intensify)

indeed

ended

can be

concious

intentionally conceived

conscious

about their actions all their life.

For example

famous

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the famous

ex-singer Britney

Spirs

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Spears

was

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were

unresposible

showing lack of care for consequences

irresponsible

child and afterwards she had started in her teens awful lifestyle, (she was addicted to drugs and alcohol).

This

happened due to the lack of awareness from

early age

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an early age

about the consequences.

In addition

, those people can do one step or make a decision without

parential

designating the generation of organisms from which hybrid offspring are produced

parental

support.

For instance

, most of

rulers

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the rulers

, king and queens were depended from their parents` and advisors` opinions, views due to their careless life before the throne. In conclusion, it seems to me that while some parents think that careless offsprings would have unforgetable childhood, overall it will cause for both sides abundance of problems.

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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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Include an introduction and conclusion

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