In the present era, children are found to have fewer responsibilities than it used to be in the past time. Some people consider it as positive development, however, some other people believe it to be a negative trend. Discuss both the views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays, modern society
consider
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considers
that it would effect positively on children
not to have
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don't have
too much
responsibilities
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responsibility
towards their actions.
However
, I think that unconscious
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
can lead to negative consequences,
esspecially
to a distinctly greater extent or degree than is common
especially
specially
in their adulthood. Most of people regard that infants should have sunny childhood.
This
means, they have a right to behave
careless
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carelessly
, just enjoy their play time in order to have not in the future any mental problems.
For example
, those children who had to be responsible and punctual from early ages, during their adult
ages they
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ages, they
always suffer from panic attacks and it
is hard for them experience
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is hard for them experiencing
experiences hard for them
is hard for them experience
some stress.
Moreover
, if people had
posive
characterized by or displaying affirmation or acceptance or certainty etc.
positive
memories during their young ages, they probably would be
more happier
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happier
more happy
happiest
and
gratful
feeling or showing gratitude
grateful
to their parents. Perhaps the best example is
armenian
the Indo-European language spoken predominantly in Armenia, but also in Azerbaijan
Armenian
culture, in which adults permit their offspring to be
unresposible
showing lack of care for consequences
irresponsible
and to do what they want and afterwards they
appriciate
recognize with gratitude; be grateful for
appreciate
appreciated
their elders and try to execute all their needs.
Nevertheless
, in my
opinion
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opinion, this
this
behaviour can spoil
children`s mind
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the child`s mind
child`s mind
. Cockered infants
indead
in truth (often tends to intensify)
indeed
ended
can be
concious
intentionally conceived
conscious
about their actions all their life.
For example
,
famous
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the famous
ex-singer Britney
Spirs
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Spears
was
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were
unresposible
showing lack of care for consequences
irresponsible
child and afterwards she had started in her teens awful lifestyle, (she was addicted to drugs and alcohol).
This
happened due to the lack of awareness from
early age
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an early age
about the consequences.
In addition
, those people can do one step or make a decision without
parential
designating the generation of organisms from which hybrid offspring are produced
parental
support.
For instance
, most of
rulers
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the rulers
, king and queens were depended from their parents` and advisors` opinions, views due to their careless life before the throne. In conclusion, it seems to me that while some parents think that careless offsprings would have unforgetable childhood, overall it will cause for both sides abundance of problems.
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The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

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Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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