Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become more useful adults. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays,

purpose

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the purpose

of education being changed in Korea. There are some people who think that

competition

in children should be made,

also

others believe that children who are taught to

co-operate

work together on a common enterprise of project

cooperate

as well as become more useful adults. There are advantages and disadvantages for both of the arguments.

To begin

with, what is good if a sense of

competition

in children is made? They could

develope

make something new, such as a product or a mental or artistic creation

develop

themselves more and more as they learn and

study

a lot to win from the

competition

. To prove

this

, in Korea, it is popular - even common now- to have a tutor who

come

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comes

to

student's house

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the student's house

to teach extra pieces of

study

with paying a lot of money. They learn faster what they learn at school.

Furthermore

, during the vacations, students

study

abroad to learn English for a month

instead

of

revise

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revising

school work. If they have experiments

such

as

study

abroad, it is one of the greatest plus

point

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points

to go to the famous well-known

highschool

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high school

.

Moreover

, there are four big school exam and two national examinations to test

students' level

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the students' level

of studies. Generally, only the highest 40% can go to

the good

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the best

quality

highschools

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high schools

and colleges. Children learn as much as they, can to win the

competition

to obtain good quality schools.

On the other hand

, as they are busy to enter the schools and

study

individually with their own tutors, there are problems. They become selfish. They become careless and don't help others

alot

give out

allot

if it is about studies. There will be no co-operations for them.

Then

, why are there companies for many people

to work

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work

in? Each of them are clever,

however

, there are weak parts and strong parts of each person. To co-operate is to improve

this

part. People talk and listen to what others thinking of and learn. That could

also

be a great opportunity to learn

instead

of learning

alone

with a forward motion

along

with one teacher. In conclusion, I strongly agree with that children should be taught to

co-operate

work together on a common enterprise of project

cooperate

rather than compete. Nobody is perfect. People learn together, work together to develop each other.

Therefore

, I want parents and teachers to educate children concentrating on co-operation, not compete and ranking them.