Nowadays there is a hot discussion about having or no having kids.

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Nowadays there is a hot discussion about having or no having offsprings. Some people claimed that having toddler was
mission
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the mission
of all people in the world while others supposed to get children was additional responsibility. In
this
essay I will consider both sides of the argument. There were numerous reasons why a lot of people supported the idea of have offspring.
First
and foremost, parenthood relations between spouses, as well as between parents and children, related to the birth of a
child
(children) and the introduction of it (them) to the culture of society. Very often when the pair married, they would like have
child
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a child
, with
eyes her
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eyes, her
mother or
behavior
manner of acting or controlling yourself
behaviour
of
father
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the father
because love of two great for them and they want give someone else, for baby. Parenthood changed the way of approach to life.
Moreover
, the meaning of life was to leave offspring.
For
example in
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example, in
the East people want to leave an heir even through polygamy for strategic growth of the country's population. Take
for example
United Arab
Emirates where
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Emirates, where
that the local population is only getting smaller and in accordance with
this
for the birth of a
child
, the state payed the colossal money, plus if
family
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the family
families
were
need
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needing
a house,
them
people in general
they
provided a house. In developed
countries there
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countries, there
was a tendency to prioritize career development rather than the need for children.
However
, women on an equal basis with men
were build
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were building
built
have built
a career and passed their childbearing period. To commence, human do not
wanted
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want
to have children because there was the responsibility for someone else life. That means people want to live carelessly for themselves and loving themselves because they were have not instincts. Another important consideration is that, with
regarding
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regard
regards
global problems of urbanization in the world for a
numbers
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number
of countries was not
priority
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a priority
to have siblings. Take
for
example Chinese
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example, Chinese
laws prohibited having more than one
child
, which puts the importance of a person at a low level. Many female children were thrown to their parents to death in the woods; there must be horrifying pictures of non-human meaning until 2016. In conclusion, I want to say that it is right to have children, if it does not contradict with
state
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the state
of law and human values.
Although
you may not necessarily meet all the trends of society, when it contradicts your views, you must consciously approach questions about offspring.
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