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Most people agree that money cannot buy happiness. Why is happiness difficult to define? How can people achieve happiness?

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Some people argue that
happiness
 comes from
money
, while other people think that
happiness
 cannot be bought by anything. I believe that there are a lot of factors to make people happy, not only by having much
money
. People have their own way to consider what
happiness
 is and what things can make them satisfied.
Happiness
 is not goods, not something that people can see from their eyes or something that they can hold in their hands.
Happiness
 is about what people feel, how much they thank for what they have been having in their life. Naturally, people are created with a dissatisfying feeling. They will never feel enough in their life, even they have unlimited
money
 in a bank.
That is
 the reason why the
happiness
 is difficult to define. Nowadays, many things are measured by wealth and possession. People think that
money
 is the most important thing to be happy, so they try to work hard and earn
money
 as much as they can. They do not realise that research has proved that some of the rich people are not really happy in their life.
On the other hand
, many people consider happy when they have a harmonious family. They do not need much
money
 to be happy, because by having a good husband, wife and children, they can feel satisfied. In conclusion, I think that every person has their own definition of what
happiness
 is. Some people agree that
money
 is the most important thing to be happy and some others believe that
money
 cannot make all of them satisfied, so it depends on their point of view.
Submitted by Manish D on

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