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Some people think that all university students sould study whatever they like. Others believe that they shoyld only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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There is an ongoing debate about whether university
students
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 should have the freedom to choose their own
fields
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 of
study
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 or be restricted to
subjects
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 that are considered beneficial for the future,
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 as science and technology.
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 some argue that
students
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 should focus only on practical and in-demand disciplines, I believe that they should be allowed to
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 what they are passionate about. On the one hand, prioritizing
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 like science and technology is essential for economic growth and societal advancement. These
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 drive innovation, improve healthcare, and address global challenges
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 as climate change and automation. If more
students
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 pursue careers in these areas, there will be a higher number of skilled professionals to contribute to scientific breakthroughs and technological development.
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, governments that invest in these disciplines may secure a stronger global position in terms of research and industrial progress.
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, forcing
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 into these
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 could lead to a decline in academic performance and motivation, as not everyone has an interest or aptitude for these
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.
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, allowing
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 to choose their own areas of
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 leads to greater motivation and personal
fulfillment
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. People are more likely to excel when they are genuinely interested in what they are learning.
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, in the early 2000s, careers in law and medicine were highly encouraged, leading to an oversaturation of professionals in these
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.
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, many
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 who entered these professions
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 societal pressure either struggled with their studies or ended up in careers they found unfulfilling.
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, when
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 have the freedom to follow their passions—whether in the arts, humanities, or social sciences—they are more likely to succeed and make meaningful contributions to society in diverse ways. In conclusion,
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 prioritizing science and technology is beneficial for the future, compelling
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 to
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 these
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 may lead to disengagement and inefficiency.
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, universities should allow
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 to pursue their own interests, as
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 fosters creativity, motivation, and long-term success in various
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.

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Coherence and Cohesion
Consider adding a brief summary of both viewpoints in the introduction to enhance clarity and set the stage for the discussion.
Task Achievement
In the body paragraphs, ensure that each point is elaborated with further examples or explanations to strengthen the argument.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay presents a clear position and follows a logical structure with well-defined paragraphs.
Task Achievement
The arguments are articulated well, demonstrating a good understanding of the topic and its implications.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • personal fulfillment
  • motivation
  • engaged
  • excel
  • contribute
  • society
  • competitive job market
  • equip
  • relevant skills
  • in demand
  • balanced approach
  • well-rounded individuals
  • interdisciplinary fields
  • innovative solutions
  • rapidly evolving job market
  • expose
  • interests
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