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Few countries think that people at the age greater than 30 years of age can do things like vote for country,marriage,getting driving license etc... ,while most of the countries oppose.What do you think?

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It is thought by a small number of countries that the legal
age
 for marrying, voting, and for driving license, is more than 30 years.
However
, a majority of nations are not in favour of
this
 perspective.In my opinion, I believe that a legal
age
 for these important things of life ought to be minimum 20 years.
Firstly
, having all these rights at young is essential.As marriage is an activity which should be done according to the will of an individual, whenever he wants it to happen.In most of the developed countries, people are free to marry after a legal
age
 of 20 years.
For instance
, in India citizens have right to marry after 20 years with anyone.
Moreover
, a person ought to have right to vote at an early
age
.
Thus
, he will be lawful to choose his own representative,
otherwise
 he could feel sidelined and neglected in the society. Another point to consider is that a teenager become fully matured after completing his teen years, so getting legal permission to drive a vehicle is mandatory, because in
this
age he
Accept comma addition
age, he
 wants to live his life up to the fullest before indulging himself in job and family for whole life.In few undeveloped nations
such
 as the Pakistan, people do not have right to drive until 30 years, which is a major cause of frustration among youth, according to a news channel report. In conclusion,
although
 some republics are in favour of giving permission to sort of things after legal
age
, there are numerous countries which permit its countrymen to
such
 rights, due to respect of feelings and emotions of society.
Submitted by Navjot Singh on

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