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Some people say that children should stay in school until the age of 18. Others suggest that educating children until the age of 14 is enough. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Some people believe that children should stay in
school
 until they are 18 years old.
however
Suggestion
However
, others think that, 14
age
 is enough to study.
Although
 there exist strong arguments on both sides here. I think the
first
 one is a better option . From one angle, he can finish
school
 at the
age
 of 14, get a job faster, earn
money
 and start his own life.
This
 may be true in
minds
Suggestion
the minds
 of some people because they do not spend extra
money
 and time on higher
education
,
instead
 they earn
money
 by working and
thus
 they serve as a source of funding for their family. Today higher
education
 requires a lot of
money
 and not everyone can afford it. Perhaps it is precisely
this
 problem
that is
 causing him to drop out of
school
 at the
age
 of 14 years. From another angle, young people who have graduated from high
school
 and have a higher
education
 face almost no difficulty in finding a job in the future, and they are usually offered high-paying jobs. I
also
 fully agree with
this
 opinion and consider
this
 to be correct. I can cite a few examples to prove
this
 point:
for example
 According to a survey of developed countries, 98% of people with a higher
education
 degree live a prosperous life.
Moreover people
Accept comma addition
Moreover, people
 who invest in themselves to study become financially independent in a very short period of time. In conclusion, there may be good aspects to graduating from
school
 at the
age
 of 14, but it is still better to continue
education
until
Suggestion
to
 have a higher
education
.
Submitted by Shakhzodbek Yuldoshev on

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