the charts below show the results of a survey on happiness ratings for married and unmarried people in the US and the effect of children on the overall rating of married couples.

the charts below show the results of a survey on happiness ratings for married and unmarried people in the US and the effect of children on the overall rating of married couples.
The charts below illustrate the comparable percentage of obtaining pleasure between two
groups
of single and unmarried people and the range of happiness
into
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couples
who has
children
in the US.
According to
the first
chart
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couples
with four distinct types of
years
are happier than four kinds
years
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old singles. The amount of enjoyment
has
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fluctuated between 40 and 45. The 18 - 29, almost 30-49 and 65 and over
years
old
groups
experience the most significant percentage of
satisfying
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which are approximately 45 and 44 respectively.
While
the first three
groups
of singles in comparison with the married have the lowest percentage which is between 21 and 22.
Although
the
satisfying
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of
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life for unmarried, who
is
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65 and over has significant changes that are around 34
percent
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. Married
couples
who have
children
younger than 18
years
old are happier than the other 2
groups
that have only and over 18
children
and no
children
. The first stage comes back to the people
by
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a
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youth under 18
years
,
second
to
who
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doesn't
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have a youngster and the
third
belongs to
couples
with 18
years
and only a youngster. Totally having a child
decrease
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decreases
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the happiness of life for
couples
in comparison with
two
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the two
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charts.
Overall
, the chart's concept
married
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people, whether they bring
children
or are not happier than unmarried
groups
.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.

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