The charts below show the results of a survey on happiness ratings for married and unmarried people in the US, and the effect of children on the overall ratings of married couples.

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The charts illustrate the comparable percentage of obtaining pleasure between two

groups

of single and married.

In addition

, the influence of children in the range of happiness is analysed

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couples

in the US.

According to

the first chart,

couples

with four distinct types of

years

are happier than the same type of

the

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singles. The enjoyment quality level among marital status

have

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fluctuated between 40 and 45

percent

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. The 18 - 29, almost 30-49 and 65 and over

years

old

groups

have experienced the most significant percentage of

satisfying

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which are approximately 45 and 44

percent

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per cent

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respectively.

While

the first three

groups

of singles, in comparison with the marrieds have the lowest percentages which

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between 21 and 22. Unlike the three

above mentioned

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groups

, 65 and over unmarried people have

significant

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difference

with

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and their enjoyment level is about 34%.

Moreover

, Married

couples

who have children younger than 18

years

old are happier than the other 2

groups

that have only

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years

youth

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of youth

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or do not have any

child

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children

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. The first place comes back to the people

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youth under 18

years

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44 %,

second

them

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who doesn't have a youngster

that is

43% and bonus 41 belongs to the

third

group of

couples

with 18

year

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and only a child.

Overall

, information on the chart results in that the quality of life among married people, whether they bring children or not,

are

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higher than unmarried

groups

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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.

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