The charts below show the results of a survey on happiness ratings for married and unmarried people in the US, and the effect of children on the overall ratings of married couples.

The charts below show the results of a survey on happiness ratings for married and unmarried people in the US, and the effect of children on the overall ratings of married couples.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The charts below show the results of a survey on happiness ratings for married and unmarried people in the US, and the effect of children on the overall ratings of married couples.
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The charts illustrate the comparable percentage of obtaining pleasure between two
groups
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of single and married.
In addition
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, the influence of children in the range of happiness is analysed
into
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in
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couples
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in the US.
According to
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the first chart,
couples
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with four distinct types of
years
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are happier than the same type of
the
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apply
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singles. The enjoyment quality level among marital status
have
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has
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fluctuated between 40 and 45
percent
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per cent
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. The 18 - 29, almost 30-49 and 65 and over
years
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old
groups
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have experienced the most significant percentage of
satisfying
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satisfaction
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which are approximately 45 and 44
percent
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per cent
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respectively.
While
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the first three
groups
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of singles, in comparison with the marrieds have the lowest percentages which
is
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are
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between 21 and 22. Unlike the three
above mentioned
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groups
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, 65 and over unmarried people have
significant
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a significant
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difference
with
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and their enjoyment level is about 34%.
Moreover
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, Married
couples
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who have children younger than 18
years
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old are happier than the other 2
groups
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that have only
and
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apply
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18
years
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youth
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of youth
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or do not have any
child
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children
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. The first place comes back to the people
by
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apply
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a
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apply
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youth under 18
years
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by
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44 %,
second
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to
them
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those
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who doesn't have a youngster
that is
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43% and bonus 41 belongs to the
third
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group of
couples
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with 18
year
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years
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and only a child.
Overall
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, information on the chart results in that the quality of life among married people, whether they bring children or not,
are
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is
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higher than unmarried
groups
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.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words groups, couples, years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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