Music is played in every society and culture in world today. Some people believe that music brings only benefits to individuals and societies. Others, however think that music can have a negative influence on both

Music
is an art. It is a language which expresses ones feeling. It makes people relax mentally.
Music
can
impacts
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impact
ones
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one's
life in both ways positively and negatively.Let us look at the impact of
music
on peoples life.
Music
represents
society
and culture of people
music
can be of various types from
bhajans
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Bhajans
to soothing
music
, hip hop to classical they hold a large part of
ones
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one's
one
culture.
Music
benefits
society
in many ways.
Firstly
, it develops the sense of belongingness among a particular group of
society
.
Secondly
, it connects people from various parts of the world.
Thirdly
, it helps people to showcase their talent to the rest of the world.
Lastly
,
music
make
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makes
them happy.
However
, we can not sideline the negative impact of
music
that affects people both individually and as
whole
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a whole
.
For instance
, some
music
might be degrading to some part of
society
which can hurt their sentiments.Sometimes
music
can make people believe in some unrealistic world which might be harmful for their future.To
conclude I
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conclude, I
would say that
music
can be
positive
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positively
and harmful to individuals and
society but
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society, but
we as people should decide that what we choose to sing or listen should not harm any individual.
Music
should have
age limit
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an age limit
because the musical content
nowadays are
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nowadays is
quite abusive
for
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to
small children.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Harmony
  • Melody
  • Rhythm
  • Socio-cultural
  • Artistic expression
  • Cognitive development
  • Soundtrack
  • Moral implications
  • Acoustic ecology
  • Intellectual property
  • Authenticity
  • Commercialization
  • Media literacy
  • Sensory overload
  • Acculturation
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