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write a letter to local authorities by requesting additional sports facilities for your age group in your area.

#authorities #sports #facilities #age #group #area
Dear Sir, I am a resident of
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 model town of Phagwara city and I am 50 years old. I have been working as a senior manager in Axis Bank Phagwara since 2014. I am writing
this
 letter to request to make proper arrangement for
sports
 facilities for the young and old age
people
 of
this
 field. In my city, there is only one public park is available in the centre of the area named Varinder Park.
This
 park is fully occupied by the youngsters and teenagers during the morning and evening time since they have no other option to play outdoor
sports
. So it's become difficult for older
people
 to do walk in
this
 garden. I want to devote your attention
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 one place. Sir, there is an open garden behind my bank branch which covered the space approximately near about 1000 square feet, but unfortunately,
people
 use it for dumping
garbage
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.
This
 operation would be ideal for outdoor
sports
 activities
such
 as Badminton and Tennis and
also
 for walking. It is my humble request to you to shift
this
 dumping range outside the city border and replace
this
 space of
sports
 arena. It will really provide
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assistance to local
people
, especially to youngsters and elder one's. Hoping for
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careful consideration of
this
 suggestion. Yours Faithfully, Ishan
Submitted by Avneet Singh on

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