Psychological illnesses may not be as obvious as physical disabilities or illnesses, nevertheless they are just as disabling in their own way. Society, however, is more accepting of those with physical than psychological illnesses or disabilities. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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We react to what we see and when it comes to illnesses,
society
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is more empathetic to visible disabilities and indifferent to people suffering from mental illnesses. While psychological disabilities are not visible to other
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people, but
are equally dangerous. I completely agree, that
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is more accepting and open to those with a physical handicap as compared to people suffering from psychological disorders and
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a part of being human.
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always is more giving and helpful to a person with any form of physical disability.
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, it is not the same when it comes to psychological disorders,
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as depression. Depression, the silent killer is on the rise today.
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disease claims
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of almost 1 million people every year around the world. A recent study shows that in 70% of the cases the person suffering from depression tries to commit suicide. But since
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always perceives disability as a physical handicap, help even from friends or family, in a lot of cases does not reach the patient on time. There is an urgent need for awareness when it comes to mental health and well-being. It is a dangerous disease which is equally potent, which the
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needs to be educated about. While people are busy in their own lives, it is important to check on friends and family about their mental health. Recently, we saw the demise of the 34-year old successful actor, Sushant Singh,
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who, despite
the successful career and fame, apparently succumbed to depression and took his own life. His friends who were with him the same night failed to read the signs and did not realise the mental agony he was going through. Had it been a physical disability or pain, perhaps they would have been able to react timely. To conclude, as a
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, we need to be aware and more forthcoming to psychological disorders to people around us. Take a moment to check on the mental health and well-being of friends and family.
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