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People generally know that the environment is important. However, most individuals still don't take responsibilities to protect the environment. Why is this? What should be done to encourage people to protect the environment? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.

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Earth
Suggestion
The earth
 is our home and it is our
responsibility
 to protect our home. The sooner we realise
this
, the better and healthier we would be. Some people usually tend to ignore
this
responsibility
 due to
sheorance
a pain that is felt (as when the area is touched)
soreness
, while others do it due to lack of awareness. A lot of people know
this
 very well, but usually the thought ‘what difference can I make alone’, deters them from doing
this
 diligently. It would require continuous efforts of everyone to save
this
 planet.
First
 and foremost, it is important to raise awareness and educate people about the benefits of protecting the
environment
. Starting right from early education for children.
For example
, Schools now days are teaching the
children their
Accept comma addition
children, their
 responsibilities towards the
environment
. Schools have started making kids do projects on
environment
Suggestion
the environment
 and to embolden
this
 thought have started celebrating the ‘
environment
 day’. Due to
this
 increasing awareness in the children they have been observed checking adults when they see them polluting or littering. While some people are unaware when it comes to their
responsibility
 towards the
environment
, others are plain simple ignorant and do not care. These are the people who usually only understand by authority. It is high time that stricter punishments and penalties should be levied on people who harm the
environment
.
For example
, In India a lot of people are seen
littering
be about
loitering
 on the streets, but the same people when travelling abroad do not dare to litter due to the heavy penalties and fines.
This
 definitely pushes them in the right direction. To conclude, I believe It is imperative that everyone realises their
responsibility
 towards the
environment
 and start doing their bit.
Submitted by Sandeep on

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